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What went wrong by ~stickwoman19:iconstickwoman19:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


You held me in your arms and the world felt right
Nothing could go wrong tonight
You whispered unspoken promises as you held me tight
Now a cloud hangs over my head as I look back at what you said
Trying to sort out this mystery of what went wrong
Rose petals can't save me now cause I know you love me not
I breath in the scent of you
I feel your arms around me and I hear your voice in my head
The unspoken promises threaten thunder from the clouds over head
It is a mystery of what went wrong
There is no way to trace the cord to the end cause only you know what went wrong
There is no explaining it, it is just a fact of life
But I still want to know what went wrong
©2008-2009 ~stickwoman19
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Author's Comments

Another love one I know, but this time I know where this one came from. Damn men

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~kangieser May 23, 2008, 10:01:17 PM
This does not follow any particular set of "rules" for the characteristics of stanzas and such, but there is great beauty in those words. When one reads it, one knows of the subconscious crazies that must have appeared in your head when this situation occurred. One can feel the sadness, the helplessness on the verge of begging, but with too much pride to drop to the knees. Well done.

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Peace.Love.Unity.Respect

If the world were backwards, we would still all just be lits in the shitterbox.
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~stickwoman19 May 23, 2008, 10:10:35 PM
When I write I tend not to follow rules, I just let the words flow. Thanks for the comment. This may be surprising but that was wrote in 10 or 15 minutes with no editing done, kinda shocked me. Thanks again.
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~kangieser May 23, 2008, 11:03:56 PM
Ha you're certainly welcome. Actually that isn't surprising at all. I am exactly the same way when I write. The only difference is that I tend to write essays and short stories. But I do try and write poems when I can think of some.

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Peace.Love.Unity.Respect

If the world were backwards, we would still all just be lits in the shitterbox.
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~saddlebred44 Jun 3, 2008, 7:47:00 PM
It just came to you? That's talent right there. I enjoyed this poem a lot.

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Don't cry because it's over; smile because happened.
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Mood: Love *LostLove223 Jun 23, 2008, 7:26:08 PM
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. This is really good. Great job on it ^_^.

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"I stare blankly at the sky wondering when the world comes to an end so no longer must I deal with my emotions." - Me
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~sanah123 Mar 2, 2009, 5:50:45 PM
wwoowwiiee! i like this! boys WILL be boys! :/

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MCR4EAK
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~stickwoman19 Mar 2, 2009, 7:50:07 PM
wow thanks

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Mood: Amazed ~sanah123 Mar 2, 2009, 8:19:32 PM
haha np!

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